Silly,funny,hyper,dreamer,
Uncle of John ,
I love my family, and chocolate,
Who feels happy when he gets a new skylander and when I get to spend time with his family,
Sad when he's alone and sad when he misses a new episode,
Who feels scared of failing star test, and red lightning,
Who needs help of completing video game,
Who gives thanks for the life he has,
Who fears red lightning, the Mexican goat sucker, competers dancing,
Who dreams of becoming video game designer,
Resident of Helotes, Texas
Coyotes
Hunter,scary,destructive,destroyer,
enemy of the wolf,
loves to eat everything,
Feels happy when it eats, rest from a hard day of hunting,
sad when hungry, sad when loses their prey,
who fells scared when mountain lions attack,
who fears mountain lions,
resident of western north America.
Wright Brothers Quotes
Wright Brothers:Wilbur and Orville
Brave, genius,amazing,wonderful,
Brothers of Otis, Ida, Lorin, Katharine, and Reuchlin,
Lovers of flight and Inventions,
Who felt happy when they found the ability of wing waxing,
Who feared of death in flight, and in failing the theroy to fly,
Who needed help in finding the perfect way to fly safely,
Who gave the better and safer way to fly,
Who dreamed of the wonder of flight,
Sad when one of the Brothers died{Wilbur died},
Residents of Dayton, Ohio.
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Comments (31)
June Shanahan said
at 11:33 am on Sep 27, 2012
Tommy, would you mind changing the wording, but keeping the meaning above? Here is what I mean, change:
I love my family and choclte
to
Lover of family, chocolate, ______,
Also, please ask your mom or your dad to help you with Wahker. Is it Walker? Spelling is not the most important thing. I'm just checking, since the WHOLE WORLD will be able to read your wonderful writing. xoxoxo
Erin said
at 7:17 pm on Nov 13, 2012
Tommy, I hope you're not more hyper than Mrs. Shanahan! And professional authors and Janice VanCleave will probably be viewing your writing, so you need to fix the errors before they see them! Other than that, your poem is good. I hope you have a good year with Mrs. Shanahan!
June Shanahan said
at 10:56 pm on Mar 1, 2013
What will you name your first video game? I can't wait to play that video game of the future!
John said
at 9:06 am on Mar 4, 2013
I'm with you tommy. I think that being a game desineer would be realy be exemly fun. And about that staar test, I would be creeped out!
Joshua said
at 9:07 am on Mar 4, 2013
Sometime I think of what I want to be when I grow up. And lots of people want to be a video game desiner. And I think you will become one.
Jaden said
at 9:12 am on Mar 4, 2013
I love this poem but what is red lightning? Also i would love to see one of your video games.
James said
at 9:14 am on Mar 4, 2013
What is red lighting sound like it would make regular lightning look like a scared mouse.
Nia said
at 9:27 am on Mar 4, 2013
James I love your simile. What is Red lightning?
Tommy said
at 10:18 am on Mar 4, 2013
Its coming...
Tommy said
at 10:17 am on Mar 4, 2013
Its coming...
Tommy said
at 10:16 am on Mar 4, 2013
Its coming...
Jada said
at 9:27 am on Mar 4, 2013
Cool Tommy! I'm sure your video game is going to be so exquisite and just as awesome as you!
Maddie A said
at 10:07 am on Mar 4, 2013
I agree with Jada i think your going to be a succesfull viedo game desineer.
Rudy said
at 9:29 am on Mar 4, 2013
If you make a good enough video game then you can get a world record for best video game. I think that no matter what happens you should not stop chasing your dream.
Tommy said
at 10:06 am on Mar 4, 2013
Its coming....
Jessica said
at 10:07 am on Mar 4, 2013
what do you mean by new episode????????????
Tommy said
at 10:20 am on Mar 4, 2013
One word TV.
Jacob said
at 10:09 am on Mar 4, 2013
Amazing!! your video game that you make when your older will be awesome I will be sure to bye it.
Emily said
at 10:12 am on Mar 4, 2013
Tommy, as always you put a lot of the thought in your writing. Nice poem.
hellotes, teaxes should be Helotes, Texas. :)
June Shanahan said
at 7:54 pm on Mar 6, 2013
Dear Tommy,
Read this line and try to figure out how to fix it:
Uncle of John walker,
Also, please ask Douglas or Ashleigh about first person and third person point of view.
June Shanahan said
at 7:54 pm on Mar 6, 2013
Yo.
Douglas said
at 7:55 pm on Mar 6, 2013
Ask me ask me
James said
at 9:36 am on Mar 8, 2013
Ask you what.
June Shanahan said
at 5:41 am on Mar 10, 2013
spelling:
resident
June Shanahan said
at 5:41 am on Mar 10, 2013
Please add spaces after the commas:
Silly,funny,hyper,dreamer,
June Shanahan said
at 5:43 am on Mar 10, 2013
Please change the following so that they are written from the third person point of view. Take out "I" because that makes them in the first person:
I love my family, and chocolate,
Who feels happy when he gets a new skylander and when I get to spend time with his family,
June Shanahan said
at 2:02 pm on Apr 6, 2013
A+ on your coyote poetry! Thank you for teaching me about coyotes. You made me love them even more!
June Shanahan said
at 2:03 pm on Apr 6, 2013
One more thing...
I love your choice of graphics. The coyote in the snow is so beautiful, Tommy.
Joshua said
at 8:11 am on May 22, 2013
I never knew that the wright brothers had 5 other siblings
Tommy said
at 9:50 am on May 30, 2013
I KNOW SOMEBODYS GOING TO COMMENT ON MY PAGE.
June Shanahan said
at 6:53 am on Jun 1, 2013
I love that soup page. Will you write a recipe? If you do, I will make the soup. Your soup page makes me HUNGRY!!!!!
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